留学文书中常见的十大弊端，你知道几个？

Passive-voice expressions are verb phrases in which the subject receives the action expressed in the verb. Passive voice employs a form of the verb to be, such as was or were. Overuse of the passive voice makes prose seem flat and uninteresting.

过度使用被动语态会使文章平淡乏味，这和被动语态的性质有关，童鞋们可要学好咯。

Before: The lessons that prepared me for college were taught to me by my mother.

After: My mother taught me lessons that will prepare me for college.

8. Do Seek Multiple Opinions.

多咨询他人的意见(三人行，必有我师焉)

Ask your friends and family to keep these questions in mind:

向亲朋好友咨询下列问：

Have I answered the question?

回答问题了吗？

Does my introduction engage the reader? Does my conclusion provide closure?

开头吸引读者吗?结尾说清楚论点了吗？

Do I use concrete experiences as supporting details?

论据有力吗？

Is my sentence structure varied, or do I use all long or short sentences?

句子结构多样化吗?抑或只是单一的长句或短句？

Are there any clich such as cutting edge or learned my lesson?

有诸如“我学到一课”这样的陈词滥调吗？

Do I use transitions appropriately?

连接词使用正确吗？

What about the essay is memorable?

文章诵读性怎样？

What's the worst part of the essay?

文书中最不好的部分是什么？

What parts of the essay need elaboration or are unclear?

文书哪些部分需要详细阐述或还不清晰？

What parts of the essay do not support my main argument?

文书哪些部分不支持我的主要观点？

Is every single sentence crucial to the essay? This must be the case.

每一独立段落对文章都很重要吗？

What does the essay reveal about my personality?

这篇文书展示了我什么个性？

9. Do Answer the Question.

Many students try to turn a 500-word essay into a complete autobiography. Not surprisingly, they fail to answer the question and risk their chances of attending college. Make sure that every sentence in your essay exists solely to answer the question.

许多学生把500字的作文写出了自传，这显然对录取不利。

10. Do Revise, Revise, Revise.

The first step in an improving any essay is to cut, cut, and cut some more.

润色，润色，再润色：给文书润色的第一步就是大刀阔斧地删减，给文章瘦身，使文章简洁有力。